English is not my first language so bear with me on this one...
(I do not remember the exact locations in the storyline for most of these, I'm hoping you can CTRL + F your way through the script)
01 - soverignity -> sovereignty (I wasn't too sure about this myself but Google says it's the latter)
02 - Quest Log: 5 Bloody Herbs -> 20 Bloody Herbs
03 - witthin -> within
04 - than -> then
05 - the the -> the
06 - I can't hardly breathe! -> I can hardly breathe! (Unless this way of speaking is a Bhatair thing...)
07 - particluar -> particular
08 - undestanding -> understanding
09 - theable -> the table
10 - melancholy -> melancholic
11 - in with -> within (this is just a very strange sentence in general) - Also perhaps a space / new line before "Considering"
12 - Just a period at the end of the sentence
13 - challenges -> challenge (Unless this is also part of Bhatair-speak...)
14 - Will you hold still for just a moment! -> Will you hold still for just a moment? - OR - Will you hold still for just a moment?! (It changes the way this is read, a single exclamation mark makes it weird to read, just maybe)
15 - Is there's -> Is there
Also the 2nd line here seems awkward and out of nowhere (then again, I guess Murielle is awkward herself sometimes), shouldn't this be like...
"Oh, and is it true that this island once belonged to the pirates?"
16 - You, there. -> You there. (Because "you [pause] there" hurts the brain)
17 - suprised -> surprised
18 - Marlied -> Marleid
I have no screenshot for this one (I clicked too fast), but the Milletian referred to Marleid as "Marlied" during the conversation that takes place outside Dunbarton's Healer House, after delivering a potion sample to Manus.
IGN: Snowie (though during the time of running G23 I was still XSnowie+Tarlach)
Server: Nao
Comments
#10 looks like correct usage to me.
#14 isn't exactly wrong in spoken language. The question mark would give it an inflection he might not be using if he's being particularly forceful. All that comes down to is if leaving it off was intentional or not.
#16 is the correct way to write it, dropping the comma is incorrect.
However...
19 - This could be me forgetting a piece of lore, but I believe it's called Aliech Kingdom everywhere else. Eiler is more typically a reference to the season of Alban Eiler or Eiler Unit in the Alban Knights.
20 - enought -> enough
21 - trying to stocking up -> trying to stock up
22 - "That is why her majesty asked that I accompany Caissa."
23 - portends -> portents (portend is the verb and portent is the noun)
24 - Partholonans -> Partholonians
25 - portends -> portents
- Caissa from Alexina Server
Part 1:
01 MIlletians -> Milletians
02 make take -> may take
03 Marlied -> Marleid (I believe this is a different instance than the one referenced above)
04 him -> it
I believe this one is from the investigation journal. It was talking about Hans drawing the flood that wiped out the Ban clan - there were no specific people mentioned.
05 these -> they or this situation?
She seems to be talking about Treasure Hunter and Pinky, so "these" doesn't work
06 It's -> it
07 -> [Milletian] -> you, [Milletian]
She's talking about us in third person in the first line then second person in the second line
08 We + We've -> you + you've
Ascon says "we" and "we've" even though he's not planning on going anywhere
09 he -> she
This is from the random dialogue that pops up when reading the journal. Altam appears to be calling Avelin the cruel one, so it should be she
Part 2:
01 Duinn.Isn't -> Duinn. Isn't
02 Scathach Beach -> SpringsOdran tells us to go to the springs, and the quest destination is the springs, but the quest window says the beach
Apparently "Scathach Beach" refers to the entire area, so I'm wrong.
03 fire!We'll -> fire! We'll
04 feel like -> feel life
05 apprciate -> appreciate
06 here -> there
He's talking about Tara/Eirawen, but we're at Scathach Beach with the Alban Knights.
07 You lost it, didn't you. -> It got lost, didn't it? or You never got it, did you?
We never received the item in the first place (which Piran acknowledges) so saying that we lost it isn't accurate Also, it's missing a question mark.
IGN: Levont
Server: Nao